Orchids

[cidermaid]

Hi Azure,
I must admit i got a bit confused by a couple of aspects of your poem.
My first stumble is concerning the title is it orchids or delicious?  
orchids makes sense given the last stanza but then so does delicious.
I quite like orchids for the images they give me.  so I have taken delicious as a first line to the poem in my crit.

Delicious!

Your morning lips  If taking delicious as part of the actual poem then I would find more sense of this stanza if you pulled delicious down to be first word on the same line and removed your.
like poppy seed tea,
served on Sundays,
when gray skies kept us
inside doing crosswords
until three o’clock.   really liked the rest of the stanza

Remember when
we played hooky,
and made love among
the looming oaks
of Cibolo Creek?   Not sure I need the name of the creek - it does not mean anything to me but then equally it does speak of a special place by naming ti so is good enough.

I thought I’d
buy some orchids
on your birthday,
so we could watch them
wither as we laugh should that be past tense? (laughed)
October away.  This last stanza felt like it was taken from a different poem / memory.  the emotion was changed by the use of wither and laughed.  I felt that I wanted some more to lead me into why the change of emotional aspect in the relationship from whistful fondness to something that could be taken as harder and cynical.  That said i really like this stanza.

All the best AJ.