11-23-2014, 03:08 PM
I see the potential for a garment but as it stands now its in threads.
And honestly i cant even suggedt anything without making huge alterations to your co tent becuase its sorganizeed. My advice would be s tick woth the content and refine. And organize.
Or you could go the other way with it and say thats what your shooting for is something crazy almost incoherent flowing from o e thing to the other as the mind thinks. Yet undertones of planning and intelligence.
For example see the literary classic. Finnigans wake
And honestly i cant even suggedt anything without making huge alterations to your co tent becuase its sorganizeed. My advice would be s tick woth the content and refine. And organize.
Or you could go the other way with it and say thats what your shooting for is something crazy almost incoherent flowing from o e thing to the other as the mind thinks. Yet undertones of planning and intelligence.
For example see the literary classic. Finnigans wake