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Janitorial Worker
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11-23-2014, 02:33 AM
Hi, dale, I think the last line could do more, "covers the floor" doesn't appeal to me, floods or tidal waves or perfume to bring up the bleach scent, something more.
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Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-22-2014, 11:11 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by azure - 11-22-2014, 11:44 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-22-2014, 12:45 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by azure - 11-22-2014, 01:59 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by paranoid marvin - 11-22-2014, 08:39 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-23-2014, 02:19 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by milo - 11-23-2014, 02:29 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by ellajam - 11-23-2014, 02:33 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-23-2014, 04:12 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by milo - 11-23-2014, 04:16 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-23-2014, 06:38 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by milo - 11-23-2014, 07:14 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-23-2014, 06:10 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-23-2014, 09:20 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by paranoid marvin - 11-23-2014, 08:44 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by just mercedes - 11-23-2014, 01:33 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-24-2014, 03:47 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-24-2014, 04:13 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by bena - 11-24-2014, 02:36 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-25-2014, 06:22 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by bena - 11-25-2014, 09:25 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-25-2014, 09:34 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by bena - 11-26-2014, 06:46 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-26-2014, 09:19 AM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by srijantje - 11-26-2014, 04:12 PM
RE: Janitorial Worker - by Erthona - 11-27-2014, 12:38 AM
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