11-22-2014, 11:55 PM
(11-20-2014, 01:49 AM)paranoid marvin Wrote: PilateI enjoyed this poem. I interpreted it as being about someone with OCD, who got to third-base and is now freaking out about it. Though I do understand that it's more likely about Pontius Pilate and his decision to give Jesus up to Jewish custody. Either way, it works for me. I think the structure suits the content well. I wish I had some negative critique to offer, but I don't. Solid piece.
Hands washed.
Scrubbed.
Think they may be bleeding
(no blood, not again!)
They're clean now,
Clean I tell you
Of that dread decision
(out damn' spot - ha!)
Conscience clear
Adam's sin removed
Once more
(but not the Apple)
Had I tasted forbidden fruit
From the tree of knowledge
Would I lie here still?
(tossing and turning)
Who am I to judge?
What right have I
To judge Man from God
(or God from Man)
Don't answer that
Please don't answer....