Demons dance in a blood-red sky

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Hi all!

Last week was a bad week here in the Holy Land: Lots of death, misery and extremism all around. The phrase "Demons dance in a blood-red sky" just popped into my head last Monday evening & I sat up until almost 01:00 writing a first draft.

So...


Demons dance in a blood-red sky
above the corpses where they lie,
above the lies for which they fell;
tears on Earth, delight in Hell.

Like Dover Beach and Flanders' fields
the ground a grisly harvest yields
of noxious weeds and mangled shoots,
toxic dreams and caustic fruits.

Abel walks among the stars
but it is Cain who bears the scars.
Now I understand what Ecclesiastes said,
pity the living, not the dead.

Where are these demons who nimbly prance
in danse macabre with quill and lance?
Dear God, dear God, they're coming nearer!
There! There! In the mirror!

Demons dance in a blood-red sky
above the corpses where they lie.



Thanks in advance for reading.

nb

Hello
This poem seems very affective ( effective) to me. I don't know enough to give much critique; however I can say I enjoy you using lie twice. The line confused me at first because I took it as demons lying down in the sky. The whole poem rolls right off the tongue ( except for stanza 3 line 3 like there is one too many words)Sorry I don't have something more for you. Thnks for the read.