Mwaba Don

[vagabond]

She moves fluidly on a circular stage.
Her style flawless,
she becomes the sparkle as the audience fades.
Slowly I become attractively restless             if you wrote "attracted restlessly" it would make sense to me
as my fear of expression wanes.
I have to hold on to this moment of moving beauty.     "moment" and "moving" is sort of contradictory
I cannot afford to darkle,                        don´t know the meaning of that word
So I hold my breath to soundly watch the beautiful dancer. <- if you leave out the word "beautiful" in this line, then the next line has more weight
She is so beautiful and feminine                         
yet I seem to capture the masculine execution of her dance,   I would leave your perspective and write something like " yet she masculinely executes her dance", otherwise i feel  a little dragged away from this image you create
she is a Perfect Muse, expressing her poetry in Dance   

greetings,