Servitude

[SimikPK]

Second Edit

She
gnawed
upon the
quick

and sucked
my
fingertip

such ruin
she vents
her body bent

me
a servile
creature
arched

We writhed
and fucked This is very obvious. No need to tell. 

Tuesday
down the
drain

I’m
three years
old again

swaddled
in rattlesnakes
praying

The line breaks/one word lines disturb me a great deal. To me it seems that the poem is very forcibly trying to be more than it actally is. Reduce the lines, make it smaller. Dont make it what it isnt.