Teddy Bear Knight

[azure]

I wrote this one for my niece.  She saw that picture floating around of the child in his bed sleeping and the teddy bear fending off the monster and this came to mind.  Hope you like it.

Teddy Bear Knight

The nightlight making a bubble of light
Keeping away things that bump in the night
An ethereal cloak holding you tight
To help fight off the creature’s might.

In the world of dreams monsters hunt and roam
Looking for a child’s mind to call home.
Through the child’s fears and frights they will comb.
Not realizing no kid goes it alone.

For by their side a champion will stand
Wielding a sword forged by might in their hand.
With blue glass eyes, fur the color of sand
Ancient leather armor aged so tan.

A Teddy Bear Knight to defend his home
His shield holds off the monsters mighty blow
Sending a message all monsters should know
That no kid will ever go it alone.

Cute, yet keeping the intended audience in mind, don't you think that this piece is a bit long winded and wordy for a child? I think this poem could lose a little weight, meaning word cuts. And the meter seems off for me, which disrupts what I interpret as an attempt at lyrical flow. I do like the tone of this little ditty, yet it needs much refinement before I would personally read it to a child. You can still write something brilliant without it being juvenile, that would equally tickle a child pink. Keep at it.

Azure