Next morning

[milo]

Thanks milo. I intend first and last strophes as present tense, the middle as background.
The youth and shyness part that you find problematic -- I want to convey the idea that although she is inexperienced and has been convinced that she is undesirable, she desperately wants to be viewed as attractive. Any suggestions welcome.

youth and shyness is conveyed fine as you just say it which isn't as problematic. i found the "lying to her loins" part of the statement to be the weakest part of the poem. Not sure I could really offer any alternatives. Of course the name "bunny" and the descriptions of fur already conveyed youth and shyness but that is besides the point here I think. For me, I would prefer her youth and shyness to be doing anything other than "lying to her loins" I think - maybe even "baking a cake", "exiting a mosh pit" "regretting sunday school tea socials" - whatever.