11-15-2014, 07:22 AM
Thanks milo. I intend first and last strophes as present tense, the middle as background.
The youth and shyness part that you find problematic -- I want to convey the idea that although she is inexperienced and has been convinced that she is undesirable, she desperately wants to be viewed as attractive. Any suggestions welcome.
The youth and shyness part that you find problematic -- I want to convey the idea that although she is inexperienced and has been convinced that she is undesirable, she desperately wants to be viewed as attractive. Any suggestions welcome.
It could be worse