The Faceless One

[paranoid marvin]

I am the faceless one.
I have no name. I am no one.
But I know the secrets -
you thought you hid. -
I see the deeds
you never did. -
I hear the words
you dare not speak.
I think the thoughts
you fear to seek.
I’ll be your judge
on that day to come. -
I'm taking names,
I'm leaving none.
So remember me:
I am the faceless one.

But I know the secrets - Definately lose the 'but'. Also consider using the word 'thing' instead of 'secret' It's one syllable too long and is a harsh word in a poem full of softer ones, almost as if the 'faceless one' is whispering to you. Also goes better with 'thought' from the next line, so:

I know the things
you thought you'd hid


I’ll be your judge
on that day to come.

a syllable too many for me, breaking the rhthym. Also you move away from the 'I' and 'the' line and the opposing 'your' patterns of the previous lines.

How about

'I'll be the judge ,
When your day comes

Also consider calling him 'Faceless One' so he has a title, and makes it sound like an entitity (which in my opinion makes it a bit more chilling)

A very nice poem overall though