Implanted Memory edit0.0001 bena

[tectak]

I find the first four lines to be bordering clicheland....not quite there but damn close.  Then the poem gathers steam and ends very powerfully.  

You know I can only comment, not critique, so this is the best you'll get from me.

love ya,
mel.

Hi bena,
I guess it is encouraging that when trying to write from a woman's perspective I can still nearly hit a cliche
Thanks for the read....I like to think I ended on a power stroke.
Best,
tectak