while it reads well, i think it's pretty much on par with the novice poet who knows how to write in the da dum meter.
while i think
We had no ending,
no said good-bye.
are two decent short lines, the last couplet dissolve any praise i may have had for it.
because of it brevity (which i like) it includes the two silly trite lines at the end which is almost a third of the thing; my vote is not so good but i wouldn't say it's sucks. it's just not what i would call good
while i think
We had no ending,
no said good-bye.
are two decent short lines, the last couplet dissolve any praise i may have had for it.
because of it brevity (which i like) it includes the two silly trite lines at the end which is almost a third of the thing; my vote is not so good but i wouldn't say it's sucks. it's just not what i would call good
