Dear Love/Hate:

[Kreative]

Dear Love: 


I'll give it a year,
To redefine these words you hear, what words?
Breathe verse amid the chorus,
Make this tarnish shine for us

You're spitting daggers,
Like last year, and every day thereafter. This line is unnecessarily long to make the obviously forced slant rhyme
How much do I need to bleed
To give you the life you need? i don't know, how much?

Light these embers,
With that burning temper, it would make more sense if you said: "you can spark embers / with that burning temper"
Warm this soul of mine,
Freezing for some time. the poem up to this point has been about your muses' volatile and abrasive temper. Now it warms your soul?

Where did I go wrong? this really doesn't sound like a "you" problem.
It's been far too long
Since I said "I love you"
And I loved you. cliche

Dear Love:
I beg "End me, please.",
It's what you owe.
It's what you sow, 
So reap, i like what you did with that adage, but the rhyming of owe and sow sounds forced.
And gift me release.

I'm asking you to hate me
So I can lose this fight in peace.

If you're going to have a poem that rhymes, I suggest implementing a meter, or rhythm; there's plenty of well-written guides on this site that present meter in its rudimentary form for neophyte poets. Regarding the poem as a whole, it was much to maudlin and confusing--bouncing from one undeveloped idea to another--for my liking.

Thanks for the feedback! In a poem that has a love theme I figured that talking about words would be pretty self explanatory but I see my mistake. And also the whole stanza about embers, it was about rekindling the love that was lost (don't know if I've ever said something that cliche wow), not describing his/her temper. The whole theme was a " love if gone what happened why do you always have an attitude" type thing. Thinking about it from an outside perspective is confusing, I'll try to implement a meter of some sort and see how that goes. Thanks again.