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Khloé Kardashian writes a poem
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(11-09-2014, 12:02 PM)Erthona Wrote:   
Khloé Kardashian writes a poem
 
Like time suspended,
            a wound unmended—
            you and I.
 
We had no ending,
            no said good-bye.
 
For all my life,
            I’ll wonder why.
I will have to play devil's advocate on this one.  aside from the games with the white space which i have never cared for and the subject matter which is a little tired the skill with verse would match pretty much anyone on this board.   The meter is spot on.  There are no true cliches.  I heard someone balk about "said goodbye" but if we can have "unsaid goodbye" we can certainly have a "said goodbye" and the concept, while new, fits perfectly to the content - a relationship that ended without closure.  The third strophe is the weakest and it is definitely suggestive of more pubescent writing but  you can certainly find worse on this board.
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Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-09-2014, 12:02 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Brownlie - 11-09-2014, 12:55 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-10-2014, 12:44 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-10-2014, 12:47 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-10-2014, 02:33 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by coy - 11-10-2014, 04:55 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-10-2014, 05:47 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-10-2014, 10:33 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-10-2014, 11:16 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-11-2014, 12:11 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-11-2014, 01:36 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by milo - 11-11-2014, 03:23 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-11-2014, 06:35 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by milo - 11-11-2014, 06:53 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-11-2014, 02:33 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-11-2014, 09:07 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by milo - 11-11-2014, 09:51 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by coy - 11-11-2014, 01:48 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-11-2014, 12:03 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-12-2014, 01:17 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-12-2014, 03:45 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-12-2014, 07:19 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-12-2014, 09:31 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-12-2014, 10:08 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-12-2014, 12:22 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-13-2014, 12:15 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by billy - 11-13-2014, 12:34 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-13-2014, 01:39 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-13-2014, 03:12 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-13-2014, 03:30 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Erthona - 11-13-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-13-2014, 08:49 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-14-2014, 09:49 PM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by Leanne - 11-15-2014, 05:20 AM
RE: Khloé Kardashian writes a poem - by bena - 11-15-2014, 06:16 AM



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