11-10-2014, 12:53 AM
Wjames- Thanks for the feedback it has been a while since I have tried to write anything and the read over helps me clean this up alot. I agree it does seem excessively wordy. I hope your winter isn't as bad as mine haha we are looking at mucho snow monday.
ising- Thanks for the helpful feedback. I am going to try and focus on mood for this next re write. maybe try and cut out some words and re word some of those forced rhymes.
ising- Thanks for the helpful feedback. I am going to try and focus on mood for this next re write. maybe try and cut out some words and re word some of those forced rhymes.
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--mark twain
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--mark twain
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