Winter's wake

[Wjames]

Winters wake
There is a moment during a summer day,
when I wish the snow would stay away. I think this is a little wordy, you could cut out some syllables pretty easily without sacrificing any content. I.e:

There is a time most summer days,
I wish the snow would stay away.


After hiking up a mountain pass. You don't need the period here.
I look at the calendar as if an hour glass.

Fall rolls around, leaves fall to annual death. I don't think you need this period either; you could use a comma.
I hear the cracking of life's decay beneath my steps. you could cut out "I hear" without losing anything. It's also a little bit of a forced rhyme, leaves crack beneath your feet; you only use steps to create the half-rhyme.

Weeks before winter I wonder if I'll feel alone.
Stuck inside with snow stacked high, a mind inside a winter globe. "a mind" doesn't add anything for me.

Before I realize it, the first cold front is here.
After scraping off the sticky frost I put my car in gear.

Looking out my foggy windshield I concur
winter's wake has come, a mental shift may occur. These are forced rhymes.

My ambition could freeze like grass white with frost.
Or I could resist the cold notion, turning fear into dust. Frost/Dust doesn't work for me as a half-rhyme.

Then I notice it on the drive,
the first snow fall has arrived.

I always forget it, the peace of mind
when on still days a flake floats down, tickling my spine. This part is very wordy, especially "I always forget it, the peace of mind when on still days"

Surrounded by falling snow I look up at winters wake.
It is now I foresee my winter joy is mine to take.  "my" and "mine" so close together is redundant. I would cut out "my".

Just what I thought as I read the poem; hopefully it's useful. I'm dreading winter myself .