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The Bluffs
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11-09-2014, 07:07 AM
Thanks for reading and commenting guys, I've made some minor changes (erosion, and teens) right now. I do think I forced the ending a little bit, so I will try and make something a little less abrupt. I also might cut out some of the excess words.
I don't have a problem with "broke" myself, it reads well enough to me. |
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The Bluffs - by Wjames - 11-01-2014, 05:16 AM
RE: The Bluffs - by 71degrees - 11-01-2014, 10:32 AM
RE: The Bluffs - by billy - 11-01-2014, 09:27 PM
RE: The Bluffs - by Wjames - 11-09-2014, 07:07 AM
RE: The Bluffs - by SimikPK - 11-09-2014, 09:31 PM
RE: The Bluffs - by purplejupiter - 11-10-2014, 09:25 AM
RE: The Bluffs - by StanleyZ - 11-11-2014, 02:24 PM
RE: The Bluffs - by paranoid marvin - 11-15-2014, 04:59 AM
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