11-07-2014, 11:38 PM
Thanks, billy, bena.
Yes, one we'd too many in first verse. I'll probably use for a time to determine.
I had crotchless camisole first off. Maybe I'll go back to that. I thought camisole crotchless ran into the next line better.
I don't see what's unusual about the word order, Bena, well perhaps the camisole crotchless. Is there anything else?
Yes, one we'd too many in first verse. I'll probably use for a time to determine.
I had crotchless camisole first off. Maybe I'll go back to that. I thought camisole crotchless ran into the next line better.
I don't see what's unusual about the word order, Bena, well perhaps the camisole crotchless. Is there anything else?
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