Who's at the door?
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Keith,

The poetry part works OK, but the story telling part has a few holes in it, making it hard to visualize. Cute idea though.

Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-07-2014, 08:20 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Erthona - 11-07-2014, 08:47 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-08-2014, 08:31 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by SimikPK - 11-08-2014, 07:19 PM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:13 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by billy - 11-08-2014, 08:25 PM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:18 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by cidermaid - 11-08-2014, 10:57 PM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:22 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Bunx - 11-09-2014, 02:42 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:27 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by justcloudy - 11-10-2014, 06:24 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-10-2014, 06:29 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Tylerc1988 - 11-10-2014, 07:32 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-11-2014, 07:27 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Pious Baloney - 11-11-2014, 05:27 PM
RE: Who's at the door? - by justcloudy - 11-12-2014, 01:26 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-12-2014, 09:02 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by SimikPK - 11-12-2014, 06:33 PM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-12-2014, 09:01 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Namyh - 11-21-2014, 03:13 AM
RE: Who's at the door? - by Keith - 11-23-2014, 02:26 AM



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