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11-04-2014, 01:26 PM

I know it's miscellaneous Rowens, so I'll keep this light. I enjoyed the content and imagery. Consider cutting S6. It changes the focus and steals some of the poem's power by moving from the back and forth to relatively flat statements.

Just some thoughts...

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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Tired - by rowens - 11-04-2014, 01:42 AM

RE: Tired - by Erthona - 11-04-2014, 06:15 AM

RE: Tired - by tectak - 11-04-2014, 06:35 AM

RE: Tired - by brandontoh - 11-04-2014, 12:19 PM

RE: Tired - by ellajam - 11-04-2014, 12:25 PM

RE: Tired - by Todd - 11-04-2014, 01:26 PM

RE: Tired - by rowens - 11-05-2014, 04:39 AM

RE: Tired - by Todd - 11-05-2014, 08:18 AM

RE: Tired - by just mercedes - 11-05-2014, 09:04 AM

RE: Tired - by rowens - 11-06-2014, 12:26 AM

RE: Tired - by just mercedes - 11-06-2014, 04:12 AM

RE: Tired - by rowens - 11-06-2014, 04:34 AM

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