11-02-2014, 10:58 PM
Thanks, Leanne. Good suggestion about numbers/ count, I've tried to do that and removed a comma at the end of line 9.
the kicks of three-year-old strops and spit
now surely that must count for something?
At one point I had the last line in italics, spit is meant to be ambiguous, issuing from both adult and child.
the kicks of three-year-old strops and spit
now surely that must count for something?
At one point I had the last line in italics, spit is meant to be ambiguous, issuing from both adult and child.
Before criticising a person try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise that person, you are a mile away.... and you have their shoes.