11-02-2014, 02:17 AM
(10-15-2014, 09:37 AM)Willpark Wrote: I am the faceless one.I really like this because it speaks truths to me, but I feel like you could have more fun with it if you give it a duality. You could use the sun as a figurative example and make the reader feel like the sun is the one who holds these thoughts. Just an idea I do like the way you wrote it out.
I have no name. I am no one. //I am the sun? how about this change.
But I know the secrets
you thought you hid.
I see the deeds
you never did.
I hear the words
you dare not speak.
I think the thoughts
you fear to seek.
I’ll be your judge
on that day to come.
I'm taking names,
I'm leaving none.
So remember me:
I am the faceless one.

