Compensations

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                                         Compensations


I think it's nice how the wind is blowing,
like something out of a movie,
almost like something out of a book.

Something old
and real—from being real a long time,
like grandparents' ghosts and ouija boards before Parker Brothers bought it.

The wind at night, especially on an especially dark night,
is like dead people alive:
I don't know why that is;

if I had to think about it
it probably wouldn't feel that way anymore.
But, then again, if I think about it I might feel it even more.

I was only thirteen years old the first time I saw someone die,
and I don't remember anything about the weather or anything.
But I saw a movie where the wind blew,

and the dead returned at night.
And even though it was a horror movie,
I felt more reassured than scared.

I like the positioning here. I get the feeling this is written from the perspective of a youngster, although I might suggest building on that a bit. The line about being 13 when the narrator saw their first death, for example. It would be more impactful for me if there was more ambiguity in the potential age of the narrator.

The other thing I might suggest it to play with pauses in your phrasing. For example:

Original:
I think it's nice how the wind is blowing.

Could alternatively be:
I think it's nice. How the wind is blowing.

For me this gives a chance to indicate to the reader that there is something more to think about in the line.

That phase also seems to tie into the later phrase "But I saw a movie where the wind blew" and the other references to wind, but I am not exactly sure about the connection here. I think you are playing with the different feelings wind can lead into, but this could be built on I think.