10-30-2014, 01:20 PM
The "miracle/irritable" rhyme struck me as a little cute, but otherwise I really really enjoyed this poem. Your work reminds me of William Carlos Williams', which might be a lazy way of saying your poems have unique forms and narratives, as well as a sharp, understated approach to perspective. They reach complex ideas in deceptively straightforward ways. They're about nothing and everything. I particularly enjoyed the "as i" list in S2, which very elegantly conveys the passing of time. Thank you for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe