Last Night's News

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I find this successful even though I can just barely accept it. Hypothermia seems an odd choice, but I'll give you that people are odd. Maybe the scotch helped avoid the pain, and maybe it was cold enough to be quick enough. I'd like to say the poem didn't need to state hypothermia but it took me time to get it even when clearly stated. If the he/she choices are wrong in my comments, I'm getting them from scotch/cointreau, which may not be accurate.

Last night I watched the news but found it hard to stay awake.
I used to get depressed...no...I suppose you were right,
I got angry then, or so you said. I thought that... If he's now seeing it her way, why "or so you said"?
I can't remember what I thought but these days I just fall asleep.
I wish I still got angry, but without you to notice I don't see the point. Love this line for its reality.
I don't see the point. Yes. I guess it has come to that.
It feels kind of liberating to say it. I don't see the point. I like all the repetition, it takes that to come to the conclusion.
All those years we planned our lives, plan A and B.
You go first or I go first. Plan C we thought about but I might prefer "we considered," I don't think you need the but.
the chances of simultaneous death...God, how long we took
to say the D-word...well, it just wouldn't happen.
And it didn't. Wouldn't have mattered anyway. It didn't? Where is she?
So last night I turned off the tv and the heating.
I opened the window and watched the moon dodging the night.These two lines hit hard, well done.
I'm pretty determined, you know, to write this. It is time.
The news will say it was a cold night, no frost but a blustery old gale
whistling in from Siberia.Siberia always got the blame. Hypothermia. I don't see what you gain with the tense switch of "got", I'd prefer "gets".
I still enjoyed my scotch before bed. Habit. I even asked you if,
if...silly really. I know it. It's just that last night
I thought I heard you say,
" Yes, I'll have a small Cointreau"... Love the end, and think I hear her too.

tectak2014
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