10-29-2014, 12:55 PM
Glide up stairs,
say "good morning"
and it will be.
- this stanza confused me.. I wasn't sure what you meant because it seemed like a contrast for a voice to come from upstairs down then for this stanza to say that the person was gliding up stairs.
Overall I enjoyed your poem, it showed the bliss in loving and being loved in return which is something many people crave. Though I think more clarity on the importance of the quoted statements would better your poem.
say "good morning"
and it will be.
- this stanza confused me.. I wasn't sure what you meant because it seemed like a contrast for a voice to come from upstairs down then for this stanza to say that the person was gliding up stairs.
Overall I enjoyed your poem, it showed the bliss in loving and being loved in return which is something many people crave. Though I think more clarity on the importance of the quoted statements would better your poem.