10-27-2014, 06:29 AM
I definitely like the title as it clearly represents the context of the poem. Additionally, the repetition of the title within the poem is classic for emphasis. That being said, I would have liked to seen "Love is Work" used in the last line of the poem as a powerful and memorable ending. When read out loud, the first stanza sounds wordy and a bit awkward. The latter stanzas have a smoother flow.
I spotted the capitalization of "work" and "love" in lines 5, 8, 17. It's inconsistent with lines 4, 9, 10, 18, 19, 21, and 22 ( where lower case was used). I could not discern the reason for this change in the verses.
I enjoy the length of the poem and the equal distribution of lines.
I spotted the capitalization of "work" and "love" in lines 5, 8, 17. It's inconsistent with lines 4, 9, 10, 18, 19, 21, and 22 ( where lower case was used). I could not discern the reason for this change in the verses.
I enjoy the length of the poem and the equal distribution of lines.
the heart and mind through hands combined
to bind my soul within each line
to bind my soul within each line