Teddy Bear Knight

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I loved your poem. It is cute and has good imaginary. I like the use of the more "adult" words in a children's' poem. I think one or two is an excellent way to introduce children to the complexities of language. I would rework it a little to make it more sing song like.


Teddy Bear Knight
The nightlight making a bubble of light
Keeping away things that bump in the night Strong start
An ethereal cloak holding you tight
To help fight off the creature’s might.
In the world of dreams monsters hunt and roam dreams, monsters?
Looking for a child’s mind to call home. I love how you say this!
Through the child’s fears and frights they will comb.
Not realizing no kid goes it alone.
For by their side a champion will stand
Wielding a sword forged by might in their hand.
With blue glass eyes, fur the color of sand ? With glass eyes of blue and fur the color of sand?
Ancient leather armor aged so tan. aged, so tan
A Teddy Bear Knight to defend his home
His shield holds off the monsters mighty blow monster's or monsters' your choice
Sending a message all monsters should know
That no kid will ever go it alone. seems unnecessary