10-25-2014, 01:18 PM
Spoke to me, the feeling were real. As a cancer survivor myself, I could totally relate to the overall feeling the poem left me with.
Was a bit stumbling to get through
"but as bold as hope is I held myself back
as I recalled my family’s presence."
Just doesn't seem to flow there. The rhythm seems off. The use of your family's presence a couple of lines down seems to search for a different word.
Beautiful feeling tho. Thank you.
Was a bit stumbling to get through
"but as bold as hope is I held myself back
as I recalled my family’s presence."
Just doesn't seem to flow there. The rhythm seems off. The use of your family's presence a couple of lines down seems to search for a different word.
Beautiful feeling tho. Thank you.