10-25-2014, 03:56 AM
(08-22-2014, 01:58 AM)UberWilhelm Wrote: I wrote this one for my niece. She saw that picture floating around of the child in his bed sleeping and the teddy bear fending off the monster and this came to mind. Hope you like it.Nice topic to write about always a special thing to write a poem for someone close.
Teddy Bear Knight
The nightlight making a bubble of light
Keeping away things that bump in the night
An ethereal cloak holding you tight
To help fight off the creature’s might.
In the world of dreams monsters hunt and roam
Looking for a child’s mind to call home.
Through the child’s fears and frights they will comb.
Not realizing no kid goes it alone.
For by their side a champion will stand
Wielding a sword forged by might in their hand.
With blue glass eyes, fur the color of sand
Ancient leather armor aged so tan.
A Teddy Bear Knight to defend his home
His shield holds off the monsters mighty blow
Sending a message all monsters should know
That no kid will ever go it alone. (consider puting the word shall instead of will?)
It has a good stlye which made it intressting to read.
I like the overal mood of your poem as well.
Your Poem has nice rhyme and rythme.
The last stanza sound a little bit out rhyme compared to the other stanzas.

