10-25-2014, 02:52 AM
I call in 'bubblegum poetry' and I love it! I like the rhyme and rhythm. I write like this allot.
It seemed to lose the rhythm for me at the last stanza and that kind of stood out. I had a good flow going but lost it at the end.
Also the lack of where I would have put comma's to make it an easier flow and an easier read, stood out for me too.
It seemed to lose the rhythm for me at the last stanza and that kind of stood out. I had a good flow going but lost it at the end.
Also the lack of where I would have put comma's to make it an easier flow and an easier read, stood out for me too.