Help

[Carlos]

Heavy drawn curtains blanket the window
darkness, darkness, cold, alone
hide behind the blankets Maybe 'shadows' instead of blankets is a better word here just because you are in the darkness.
clutch your pillow, cover your face You are saying 'your' when in the next line you say 'me' maybe 'my' here too instead of 'your'
Help me, help me
You scream, yet you hear nothing but silence Again you go back to third person with 'You' maybe 'I' here instead of 'You'
Falling, lonesome, down the harrowing abyss
Does no one hear me? Will no one help me?
 
Help me to step out from the dark,
to feel the sun shine on my face,
to feel its warmth in my heart.
Help me step out of this shadow of memory,
out from the cold, abysmal yearning of my soul
and become safe again.  Maybe 'To' instead of 'and' To become safe again
and become whole again. Maybe 'To' instead of 'and' To become whole again

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I really like the way help is asked for in this, very unique!