10-22-2014, 08:12 PM
The last stanza comes wholly out of the blue. She's good until suddenly she's an anchor and a source of pain--you should rewrite such that her thorniness is anticipated.
A yak is normal.
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She is - by arbitraryarmor - 10-22-2014, 07:25 PM
RE: She is - by crow - 10-22-2014, 08:12 PM
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