She Will Return
#8
I like the imagery you are using in this poem. Perhaps you should use a different word instead of blemishes in line 8. There are not many lines in this piece and to use the same word twice makes for a stale read in a way.
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She Will Return - by Glittercake - 10-16-2014, 12:18 AM
RE: She Will Return - by bena - 10-16-2014, 12:30 AM
RE: She Will Return - by chris_the_princess - 10-16-2014, 07:58 PM
RE: She Will Return - by billy - 10-16-2014, 11:13 PM
RE: She Will Return - by stevesteve - 10-17-2014, 11:38 PM
RE: She Will Return - by chanchan77 - 10-20-2014, 12:09 PM
RE: She Will Return - by arbitraryarmor - 10-20-2014, 09:16 PM
RE: She Will Return - by phacade - 10-21-2014, 03:17 AM



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