Distilled. (Edit 2)

[tectak]

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A ring of tears form,

drop back, drops. Singular ring
 
re-form.


Caught at the neck of a glass condenser,
freshly formed pearls
vaporise. I don't really see what the advantage is of line breaks being so inconsequentially chosen. "vaporise" would be so much better if it was kept with pearls.
Gravity fed legs collect Are the legs "collecting" as in "grouping" or as in "gathering". If gather then say gather. If you insist on grouping then I am not sure of the imagery and how it relates to "run in spirals" Either way it is an odd picture. I can tell you see it but the last two lines in this stanza only add to the enigma. I guess what I am saying is you are making the simple complex. Is that your aim? Perhaps a Liebig condenser is too much...at least you cannot see inside the metal version!
and run in spirals,
a falling curtain of surface tension
to prove the gunpowder test.

Unwatched the boiling flask ...unwatched?...so how do you know...and would the result be the same if watched. We are talking distillation not quantum mechanics
flames the remains.
Whorls of water
bleed and diffuse into the mix.
The final proof,
at the digital density meter bench,
reads weight by volume.On balance, yes to the methodology but the mixture of science and sentiment is a complex draft.

I prefer to simply count the tears
as they rise and fall in my wine glass. Why a wine glass?I though we were distilling not brewing?

Under proof

                     there is no spark. Correct

Don't take my clever-dick comments to heart....but as soon as we introduce the scientific endeavour in to poetry we tend to bend veracity verse. That's ok...but I can only call it as I see it.
Best,
tectak



original as posted

Distilled

A ring of tears form,

drop back,
 
and re-form.

Caught at the neck of a glass condenser,
freshly formed pearls
vaporise.
Gravity fed legs collect
and run in spirals,
a falling curtain of surface tension
to prove the gunpowder test.

Unwatched the boiling flask
continues to flame the remains.
Whorls of water
bleed and diffuse into the mix.
The final proof,
at the digital density meter bench,
gives a reading of weight by volume.

I prefer to simply count the tears
as they rise and fall in my wine glass.