10-20-2014, 09:37 PM
It's quite well composed, I must say. Aside from a few wording issues already touched on, there's really not much to say. Perhaps change "blanket" to "cover" for the first line? Blanket is a more positive term with light connotations; perhaps 'obscure' or even 'cover' would fit better.


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