She Will Return

[chanchan77]

I also have to agree with the other comments. The blemishes are a very cool concept and I like it a lot but there is no need for repeat. I'm not really big on punctuation and capitalization so I'm not gonna really tell you what to do about that.

Footsteps fade,
Imprints stay.
Blemishes;
they cover my heart.
They keep our love alive
Even when we’re apart.
Until we are together <-- Would take these three lines out but replace with something else
the blemishes stay.-----^
No change in weather.---^
Storms rage inside my mind
until
        our
               fingers
                            are
                                   intertwined.<-- I really like the last two lines and would totally keep them as the ending. Maybe its just because I really like touch and feel when talking about love. Intertwining of fingers like yes I love it, okay, call me insane.

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