10-19-2014, 11:49 AM
Amazing poem--I really felt and related to it. "Burlap silence" sounds beautiful as a word pair, but I was not exactly sure of the meaning. Also, maybe a different word choice other than "trip" could be used to convey the awkward journey that is a silent elevator ride. You have a talent for sure.
Edit: Now that I've seen someone explain the burlap meaning a rough, scratchy silence rather than a silky one, I really get the imagery there. Great, unique pairing of words and senses.
Edit: Now that I've seen someone explain the burlap meaning a rough, scratchy silence rather than a silky one, I really get the imagery there. Great, unique pairing of words and senses.