Virginea Wolfed '65

[tectak]

I'd suggest removing was from the first line altogether and putting it in the 2nd line where the 2nd she is

Virginea's soul crammed in to her eyes;
she cried because her body was despised.

I like the last line. Should it be anyone's?

Thanks for the take ray. I need to do something but the "...her body was despised" is open ended. I want to say that SHE despised her own body. Interesting that the assumption is made that she cried for that reason...there could be another
Best,
tectak