Elevator Music

[RSaba]

Nice little scene! Concisely written. I enjoyed this. The image of the doors kissing, almost more intimate than the non-exchange of the elevator riders, is probably what stuck out the most for me. The only bit that tripped me up was "thoughts stay home" - I got it, but I'm wondering if there's a slightly clearer way to put it.

The doors kissed to mark the start
of another trip to the ground floor.
Soft jazz battles with the burlap silence
of a man and woman alone together.
Thoughts stay home to hum, tap, and sigh
at the sight of another missed opportunity.