Virginea Wolfed '65

[tectak]

hi tom
it feels forced to fit the rhyme change the rhyme and the speech reverse you can

Virginea's soul was crammed in to her eyes; i think this is a great opening line, which can be interpreted in a few ways.
she cried because her body she despised. i see they had yoda-speak even in 65
Young lust her drug, an easy pill to swallow. the last phrase feels really cliche, maybe it was fresh back in the days though, now, it needs working on.
Today she's mine...she's anyones tomorrow. this is a nice touch it has a sense of pride in owning her for the day. and a lack of feeling.

From archives. tectak 1965
Apologies to Barbara Streisand

Yeh...I am popping these oldies up since I discovered a gap in the market. Sombody stole my "...lust is the drug" and cliched it in to "..love is the drug".
Keep critting...it makes me feel young again.
There IS a change I made in L1. Originally, and contemporaneously, the "was" was "I". What say you?
Best,
tectak