Lyrics. Gainer Girl

[billy]

most lyrics i read have capped lines, that said most most people spell there. they're and their wrong. it's a choice, readability-wise i always prefer caps to start a new sentence. one thing i could never fathom about lyrics was why nearly all of them were cliche rich . i didn't listen to the song (i couldn't) and i don't do the download thing. have you tried putting it on youtube in order to make it more accessible? as far as songs go it reads okay but i can't see any depth to the words.

https://dl.dropbox.com/s/7ny14jcohrk5hrk/Gainer%20Girl.m4a?dl=0

Gainer Girl

[Verse 1]
My 
Umbrella's open
Underneath a solar storm.

Birds,
Silhouetted, drift
Noiselessly above the world. the first verse are stanza, a verse rhymes. though i suppose in songs stanza is an unused word a decent non-cliche opening.

[Verse 2]
Gainer tempts me--
Jackknife, too! are these musicians, artists  perhaps? could you give the reader/listener more?

But my purposelessness . . .
I'm a rhapsody in blue! i bet you're really a cliche

[Verse 3]
Handle bars . . .
Broom straw . . .
Island advertisements--
Is this paradise? i don't thing the ... are really needed.

[Verse 4]
Tap tap,
I surrender!
Knock knock--
Who's there?
Let's not talk about it . . . i got nothing here apart from someone knocking on the door and someone surrendering it feels a bit like gratuitous submission.

There's a world where
No one cares! again it feels very cliche

I want that purple jacket;
You can have my love.
Hold on to your frustrations--
I can be quiet.

[Verse 3]
Baseball cards . . .
Petty theft . . .
Stained-glass cartoons . . .
Hand me it?
A world of balloons!