NO SLEEP

[billy]

while it has rhythm and some good drug related images i found it hard to actually get into. there are some good or better than good parts. that said, after 4 or 5 reads i did get into it and enjoyed it. i found a couple of things to be to near to cliche but it's that type of poem so they kind of fit. i would have had to have worked a lot harder to get into the rhythm of the poem if the beat wasn't stated but nonetheless after a read or two the beat is evident, though i did slip up in an odd place.


Lortab punk
upped on Spray Paint
marches to the sniff of a different Jenkem tank
Methadone prone
downed from agony.

the above does work though i always saw methadone as an opium substitute and sometimes as a pain killer. i can't see the relationship between glue sniffing and opium related drugs or substitutes of them. I'm sure many are googling jenkem tank (i know i did and that's okay but I'd have preferred something a little more generic.

fire-walker stalks through streets uncertainty feels to much like a pop reference [street's]
mole to the day
eyes caked shut
this is a good portrayal of many types of user.