She Will Return

[billy]

i would reinforce what chris the princess pointd out.  the first two lines feel like opposites. the last five lines are very weak and much of what's being siad feels as though it's repeated throughout the poem. removing some of the smaller words would make it less wordy. (you can have a wordy poem with short lines.
see the words in bold. the no change in weather metaphor feels trite as though it doesn't really have a reason for it being there.

Footsteps fade,
Imprints stay.
Blemishes;
they cover my heart.
They keep our love alive
Even when we’re apart.
Until we are together
the blemishes stay.
No change in weather.
Storms rage inside my mind
until
        our
               fingers
                            are
                                   intertwined.

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