10-15-2014, 09:46 AM
Owl--
"Although I think it'd be interesting to possibly add an adjective"
--you missed that "mountain" *is* modified--by "my".
---- I suppose I just meant further modification could possibly be of use, but now I'm thinking an adj. might take away from this line (in this instance), rather than add. It might seem forced since (as you said) "my" is already present, which seems to be sufficient without the addition of an adj.
What I mean is, "my" is a hugely important modifier. It *must* be taken literally, as well as every other way, in order for the narrator to be revealed.
"Although I think it'd be interesting to possibly add an adjective"
--you missed that "mountain" *is* modified--by "my".
---- I suppose I just meant further modification could possibly be of use, but now I'm thinking an adj. might take away from this line (in this instance), rather than add. It might seem forced since (as you said) "my" is already present, which seems to be sufficient without the addition of an adj.
What I mean is, "my" is a hugely important modifier. It *must* be taken literally, as well as every other way, in order for the narrator to be revealed.
A yak is normal.