restless

[Word Weaver]

restless - Sets the stage. Very strong word, evokes an image of anxiety, boredom, emotional unrest, and compels me to find out what is causing the nagging dilemma..
I've got this indecision . . . - I feel this was already said in the first line and is not necessary to re instate
The power's out
in the kitchen
on my mountain. - these three lines  are my favorite! It tells the whys and it tells all!  The kitchen connotes 'very personal ', it is the 'heart' of the home and  the power being out meant that the spark is gone, romance is dead, and the fault lies on your 'mountain'side -  an acknowledgement, the climbing uncertainty, the struggle of indecision, you've fallen( like from a mountain) out of love! Would it be correct for me to say, these are the central metaphors of the poem?



I decided - for me, I feel this is unnecessary to state again as you have already acknowledge this fact on the last three lines of the first stanza.
I'd go and check - I'll or I will go check ( I would omit 'and')
the itchy sidewalk - Im not too fond of 'itchy' but it is interesting so Ill leave it be
for a cigarette. - evokes an image of stress, the urge to step out cuz I can't stand you and the last three lines  together suggests a typical lame excuse when there is none to give


And I'd be right back . . . - now, this is a classic! meaning 'goodbye'


How could I just
lose your love that way? - I agree with Billy to lose 'that way'
But I did. -  and what if this  was changed into a comma and
That's what I did today. - instead of 'That's what I did' just end it with 'today'...

Very intriguing! For me, its an excellent example of less is more. Thank you for a wonderful read and learn. Best regards, Kate