When autumn (Edit 3)

[Alexand3r]

might be because my mother tongue is not english, but it seems to me that you concentrated to much on using flowery words and metaphors and in the process left the content behind, like it was only a secondary part of the poem. When reading poems, i often notice that the most powerful ones often have simple wording, but express something so fundamentally right that you go like "this is like a law of nature! what he/she wrote describes this in its own way, but still perfectly". Here, i'm so busy with romantic visions of idealised autumn scenes! that true feeling of autumn, the smell of damp leaves, cold misty mornings, the way morning mist dampens the worlds sounds and so on.... you see, i miss the impressions autumn has on people, this melancholy pared with beauty, and then the knowledge that everything in nature will come back again, but maybe some things in my life are just gone/will come for the first time.... what i would do: just go out one morning /evening (because those are the special times of day, especially in autumn) and then somewhre calm, just take deep breaths, try to hear everything, smell everything and then try to find out what makes this epxerience feel like autumn to you! just random thoughts
greez
Alex