The Sea of Truths

[musicismylife78]

This is the first poem I have written in a while, let me know what you think! Don't hold back on the criticism.

Sea of Truths
The girl was set adrift
upon the sea of truths
in a boat that she had built
of dreams and simple youth.

Your first stanza sets the tone for the rest of the poem well. Your intent is clear.

She insisted she'd be fine
as she raised her scarlet sail. I like that the sail is scarlet. It adds the element of symbolism.
It would be okay in time,
all she needed was a gale.

She remained unaware
of the storm that had begun
She didn't say a prayer,
never did she try to run

The waters were rough, they <- I think "they" should be moved to the following line. The natural pause after the line makes this awkward.
grabbed her skin, pulled her hair. <- I would replace the comma with an "and" in this line if I were you.
They told her scary things,
of which she had been unaware. <- The ambiguity is a nice touch

She insisted she was fine
as the sea took in her ship
The water looked benign,
But the sail began to rip. <- Nice symbolism!

Yet her voice stayed strong. <- This is a good, impacting line. Nice implication.
And she shouted for some help
But she then heard the song
Of the voices in the kelp. <- I don't know that I understand the purpose of the kelp? I think that the word interrupts the flow of the poem.

Nothing drowned the sounds
of sirens in the distance.
They whispered tempting things,
She lost all her resistance.

She took a breath of air
And it would be her last.
Water caressed her hair,
touched dead hands of the past <- Definitely my favorite line of the poem!! This is excellent expression of your message.

The waves tossed golden curls <- I like the description of her hair here. Very creative.
lulling her to sleep.
They filled her eyes with pearls, <- The pearls are a nice touch

And she sank into the deep. <- Could you please rephrase this line? I think that the line sounds too... conclusive. I would rather the poem be "left hanging", I think.

Overall an excellent poem! Your message is conveyed quite clearly yet creatively. Your balance between the two is nice. This was enjoyable to read, despite its sad message. I hope that my critique helps. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading your work in the future.