haiku

[cjchaffin]

When I first read this, I saw a child's kite. I think the suggestion to make this a haibun is excellent - or even a tanka, with the final lines showing what happened next, making clear the double meaning of 'kite'.

thanks mercedes, i thought that was a great suggestion as well. i like a little mystery but a tanka or haibun would definitely flesh out the story a bit more. food for thought! thanks!